Monday, April 6, 2009

Untitled No. 2 (I've been having trouble with titles lately...)

Sometimes, startled by dusk, she would
creep slowly down the splintered stairs,
to the clammy, dusty floor of the basement.

Reaching beneath the workbench,
her hand would emerge with a flathead, thin enough
to pry the paneling loose from the far wall.

The space was dark and cold, smelling
like a dried out riverbed. Large enough for her hand
to fit in and place, replace, and remove.

She kept her memories there, tended them when
the rest of the house slept: a photograph
of the dead family dog, Rosey; blueprints

of a tree house; a Campbell’s soup can, filled
with stones; a lock of her best friends hair; the receipt
from breakfast with her father, the day before he died.



(Unsure about the ending... unsure about this in general... oh well.)

2 comments:

  1. I like the ending. It's surprising and very loaded. Adds a whole new dimension and meaning to the list and to her nostalgia.

    But what the heck is with that third to last line???? How am I supposed to write from THAT???

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  2. Wow, Del, this is awesome! It exactly fits my mood this week, and a book I just read, called "Here at the End of the World I Learned to Dance." I can picture the girl and the basement perfectly. Your list is comfortable, yet shocking all in the same moment...surprising in an "of course" sort of way. I love it.

    P.S. I like what you did with my 3rd to last line...using/changing them is sometimes the best part!

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